Rainbow Revision

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Sentence revision: Creating sentence variety in essays.

Materials needed:

  • Seven different colors of writing implement (a box of crayons/colored pencils/markers—your choice. Just be sure you have 7 different colors of ink.) Note: Alternatively, you also could use color highlight on the computer.

Purpose

You've written your essay; now, let's see if our major writing goals for this essay have been met.

  • Varied sentence structure and word choice
  • Use commas properly in a series
  • Ensure correct capitalization and spelling

Procedures:

  1. With your yellow color, highlight sentences, which begin with adjectives or adverbs ("Starved, we stopped at McDonald's.")
  2. With your blue color, underline sentences which begin with prepositional phrases (with..., in..., into..., over...).
  3. With your red color, underline sentences which begin with "A" or "The", "This", "There", etc.
  4. With your green color, underline sentences that begin with a pronoun (he, she, we ,it, they, their, our, etc.)
  5. With purple, underline sentences that begin with verbs ("Whirling around, I saw..." or "Running, she tripped...").
  6. With brown, underline sentences which begin with a time element or word (after, later that day, also, finally, then, etc.).
  7. With orange, underline sentences which begin with a noun (Harold, students, cats, etc.)

Finished? All sentences colored.

What do you see?
If you see a rainbow, you have sentence variety. If you do not see a rainbow, revision needs to take place.

Adapted from Alzire Messenger